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blizzard rage

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burning with cold fire

all the passion of blizzards
distilled in one glance
I couldn't think of a better title, recommendations are welcome! (Update: I got rid of two words in the title)
The third winter-themed haiku today. I was angry tonight, because not for the first time some creepy guy followed me out of the train station and nudged me twice on the way. I hate it when strangers follow me and touch me to get my attention despite all of my attempts to signal disinterest. A cold fire in my heart.
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somethingzenzen's avatar
I'm sorry to hear that happened to you. :( I think the poem conveys your feelings about it pretty well.

As for the title, "cold" and "blizzard" are already used in the poem. You could just call it "Rage". That pretty much says all it needs to. :)

Also, I'd recommend changing the first word to "burning" instead—just something to consider: it gives the poem a more immediate presence, draws the reader in to feel the same emotions more intensely.